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Wed, May. 3rd, 2006, 07:07 pm
schizophrenic0:

Behold me as I attempt to bring this community back to life!

Title:babydolls story
Suethor:angeloves1

Name: Babydoll
Oh, What Gorgeous Hair!: Not mentioned
Eyes Like...: Again, not mentioned
Sue-type: Raped sue
Of Course, She Owns...:The refuge. After her mom died, Babydoll took it over...
I Didn't Know He Had a Sister/Cousin!: Kid Blink
She's From Where?: Brooklyn...maybe?
Whose Girlfriend is She, Anyway?: Racetrack's
Rating: I have to say 5.
Notes:This is...yeah. I can only pray it’s a joke. The one redeeming factor I can find is that she isn’t writing in the accent. Still, the story follows no logic, she obviously hasn’t proofread her things or gotten a beta. Not to mention, the story is just generic. Oh, and she keeps referring to Jack as “Jake.”
Excerpt(s):


That’s when I found out that kid blink had a sister who got lost.
I told him I got lose when I was little and landed with the mom and dad who work at refuges
So I thought to my self he might be my brother I asked him what his sisters name was he said lily
No kiddin I said that’s my real name


After I kicked the boys out I started to change out of my dress when someone came into the room is was Oscar.
“What are you doing with that Race kid your mine.”
“I’m not yours not leave.”
“I’m not leaving till I get a kiss.”
“RACE, KID BLINK HELP.” I yelled
The guys came in and they got Oscar out of the room as Kid Blink sat with me while I told him what happen.
“It’s ok I wont let him or his brother near you.”
“I love you Kid Blink.”
“I love you too Babydoll.”


Best Line: “Kid Blink and I were walking down to Medda’s because I needed a job and I was a great singer and dancer well that’s well Kid Blink say’s.” (Of course you are. You’re a Mary Sue!)

Fri, May. 5th, 2006 12:36 am (UTC)
falling_shadow

Ew. EW. Not only is she a Sue, the grammar is horrible! Grah. That is such a pet peeve of mine...

Yay for getting the community going again! That's actually something that I want to do this summer once school is done getting in the way of my fandom participation. ^_^

--Lily

Fri, May. 5th, 2006 01:32 am (UTC)
schizophrenic0

Yeah, Lord knows there are enough bad fics to keep this community alive and well.

Thu, Feb. 8th, 2007 10:50 pm (UTC)
apathy4_10: *eye twitch*

That was...ew. All I can really say is WTF?!

I shall have to look to see if there are any I can spork. My story is far enough along to be sporked yet. Haha, although I wouldn't mind someone sporking it.

What kind of name is Babydoll? Reminds me of what a porn star's name would be.

So many bad things...the grammar. *eye spasm* *falls off chair* Owwwww.

Thu, Feb. 8th, 2007 10:52 pm (UTC)
apathy4_10: Re: *eye twitch*

Grrr. Spelling correction. My story isn't far enough along to be sporked yet. I hate this keyboard!